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When you were in sixth grade, a friend of a guy you were dating decided he didn’t like what you looked like. He called you a whale. He told you to go on a diet. He told you to get braces. He told you to kill yourself. He bullied you so cruelly and consistently that you tried.

Aaron Coleman, Leon Wieseltier, and the Life Span of Misconduct - The Atlantic

Do not overlook sixth-graders dating.